10/9 Critique

  1. I would say the only story that could surprise someone is ‘Test return times down to eight hours’. This is an important story for students or staff getting tested on campus because a week ago it would take almost a day to get test results back. The other three stories, however, seem to be selected because of the topic they represent. 
  2. I think the protesting photo is the best visual on A1 because it shows human faces actually doing something. The testing photo isn’t bad, it’s just a little generic. Looking at the voting picture, I would think the story would be about voting in-person rather than mail-in The kingfisher picture is generic, but I’m not sure if anything different would’ve fit, maybe no picture?
  3. The lead story, the protest story, doesn’t really follow the proper lead story structure. The headline is a little bigger than the rest, but not by much and the headline doesn’t stand out, the picture does. It helps the picture is a good one, but the story itself really doesn’t stand out to me. I also don’t think this was the most surprising news story. The centerpiece package of this page is technically the lead story because of how large the picture is. 
  4. Between A2 and A3, I think the study abroad story could be more engaging than the kingfisher or mail-in voting story. It has a bigger immediate impact on students because many at least consider study abroad as an option. 
  5. I think a hidden gem was the Reddit story on A4. This type of story is really fun to read and a lot of students can relate to this type of light-hearted story. I also think it’s a good change of pace from all the negative coronavirus-related stories we have to produce. 
  6. I think the Block I story could’ve used another source like a student planning to attend the watch party. That would’ve provided a better human face to this story. 
  7. In Thursday’s paper, I think the group fitness story could’ve had more photos. It’s interesting to see how clubs like these are operating right now. 
  8. I think the main point of this infographic is clear. It’s a little difficult to read, but I don’t think it’s deceiving or spins the topic. 

Critique for 10/9

  1. The only story that might be unexpected for readers would be the story about test times. This is information that can help form their decisions in their daily lives. I think the protest coverage is interesting (I’m biased) but the story about encouraging mail-in voting seems like the preachy problem we had last week.
  2. I really like the protest picture because it shows an actual action and lots of people in the midst of a protest. It also shows the location and an idea of the route that a march took through campus. For mail-in voting, the picture shows some of the precautions that citizens can avoid by mailing in their votes. The picture for the test time doesn’t offer much useful information. Infographic in Thursday’s paper seems interesting.
  3. It seems like Monday’s had two interesting visuals in the top, but the testing center photos don’t really grab my attention. Doesn’t seem like any of the articles is really the main, most important one, aside from the protest coverage but I’m not sure if that should be. For Thursday the false positive header grabs my attention the most.
  4. Jewish organizations opposing ISG is very interesting to me because there is conflict. Maybe it didn’t make front page because there wasn’t a visual for it? Food insecurity story in Thursday might be more important because it could help people out to see that.
  5. Posting a meme on the front page of the paper would definitely increase the “talk factor”. I’m curious as to the attribution for the picture. Unless Kenyon created it, shouldn’t it be attributed to the reddit account that posted it? I don’t know, just curious. Ballot box is also interesting and the image provides information.
  6. I think most of the stories within the inside pages could have benefitted a lot from human faces, especially the Halloween one. Halloween is all about festivities and people doing fun things, there should be more about people and less about city ordinance.
  7. Maybe photos of people working out inside the arc because it looks much different now with all of the restrictions. Also maybe get a photographer into some of the apartment gyms where people usually aren’t following the guidelines by wearing masks, wiping all the machines down and standing six feet apart.
  8. The graphs that appeared seem simple and easy to read for me. I like them, but I really don’t know much about them. Additionally, yeah the fully blocked out ballot box looks much better.

October 9th Critique

  1. I feel like the stories on A1 in Monday’s paper were more so selected for the topics that they represent. I think the most surprising thing on the page would be the “Test return times down to eight hours” because that is something that affects the day to day lives of students.
  2. For the visuals on the page, I really like the protest photo. It shows people in action, in the streets protesting. As for the rest of the photos, they’re pretty generic, but then again there are only so many ways we can capture COVID testing.
  3. For the primary focal points, I guess I’ve always been told (by previous editors) that each story always has to have art. I can definitely put more effort into creating more of a lead story rather than just big art. Before this class I kind of thought that the biggest art should be with the biggest story, but now I know that that’s not necessarily the case.
  4. For the stories on A2 and A3, I feel like the study abroad story is pretty impactful, because I know I had heard about some people who were optimistic about studying abroad in the spring. This would be big news to someone like them. 
  5. I think the “hidden gem” this week was definitely features. I agree that the clipping of the ballot box could have been closer. I like what you did as an alternative. I think I was just trying to go for a collage-type look. I really liked the Reddit-themed page too. Last week’s class kind of inspired me to be a little more creative with these pages. I want to carry that over to the rest of the paper (maybe not the same as features, but something similar).
  6. Maybe for the Block I story, it could focus on one of the people who’s organizing the event. The halloween COVID story could possibly include interviews from parents or children in the community to create more of people-centered article rather than an information only-centered article.
  7. Although there isn’t a whole lot of action, I think the photo of the pre-packaged meals on A1 could possibly stand on its own. Perhaps a different version of this concept. It’d be cool to get a picture of people grabbing the meals to show what the COVID-era dining room experience is like.
  8. The infographic was admittedly way too small to really understand without having to squint. If it were more visible (apologies for this), I think it would be easy to understand.

Paper Critique

Front picture is too big and missing an action. I like that it shows real people and is at the testing site, but I think it would have looked better if the people were doing something with their hands instead of sitting/standing idly.

I don’t really like starting the headline with the word “about”. I think headlines should be more direct. Might just be a personal preference.

Center picture on the front page looks to be a good size and is interesting to me. Lots of people all doing something.

The picture of the TPUSA speaker looks kind of awkward to me but maybe that is the best we can do when all of the speakers give speeches over Zoom calls.

Packed bar on page 2 is interesting to me, as well as the overhead shot of KAMS to see their upper floor. 

Story on 3A is interesting, as well as the picture of the mask with the words wrapped around. The headshot of the professor seems pretty big and boring though. 

4A zoom call picture is interesting and goes with the story well, but I don’t like that the club’s graphic is so big and prominent. Comes off as kind of like PR, but might just be my opinion.

Graphics for the voting story look appealing.

I feel like i’ve seen the image of Chancellor Jones on 3B a bunch of times throughout the last couple months. 

Images for sports and opinions worked well and looked interesting, but maybe that just comes with sports having a lot of action shots and having to use archive pictures at the moment.

Monday, September 28 Paper Critique

I’m not going to pretend that this was a spectacular paper because I know it wasn’t It makes me wish I would have chosen Thursday’s paper to edit, but I know that either way, they’re being published, so it might as well be looked at.  

  • A1
  • Older photo for top story 
    • Wasn’t able to get new photos without someone from Student affairs present. Now we’re only allowed in once/week if we tell them a day or two in advance 
  • Another old photo with the wrong photo credit (it’s a file photo) 
    • Flu shot centers weren’t open this past Sunday while we were laying out the paper. We also need someone from student affairs for these photos. 
  • I’m not very happy with the widows and orphans in the subheads 
  • I wish we could have gotten more than a few zoom photos, but I also know it’s difficult to get more than that for some things right now. 
  • A2 
    • The photo of KAM’s isn’t as recent as I would like it to be, but I do think it shows a lot of people gathering in the bars which was what we were trying to do. 
  • A3 
    • I am aware that we don’t usually/are not supposed to include graphics within news, but since it was more of a feature-style story, I think it went with it pretty nicely.  
    • I would prefer the portrait be smaller, but A1/A3 are usually the last ones to be designed, so it was difficult to mess around with different design layouts. The portrait photo was also pretty grainy, but it was the only photo of her that we were provided with and could find. 
  • A4 
    • Another instance of widows in sub heads 
    • I think that, although it’s a zoom photo, the photo used in this article was cool because it showed the whole group, even though they weren’t in person.  
    • For both of these pages, I am aware that the art is massive. I would really prefer that Features has three stories instead of two each paper, but sometimes it just isn’t feasible. 
  • A5 
    • Same things apply here. I wish I could have made the art smaller, but we have a lot of room for some generally small articles.  
    • I think we would benefit from three features stories. 
  • A6 
    • We have a new night editor and he didn’t catch the drop cap error. I also am at fault because I didn’t thoroughly check his work before we sent the pages over. 
    • He also didn’t adjust the size of the headline when he made the adjustment on the page. This was another thing I could have caught before I sent the pages. 
    • I also think the second headline should be a lot smaller. 
    • I don’t like that the second photo is seemingly a lot bigger than the first photo. I think the second article should have gone on top too. 
  • B1 
    • I think B1 generally turned out pretty well. 
    • Decent-sized photos. 
    • The spacing around the Mike Epstein headline was a little wonky. Definitely needed to be adjusted 
  • B2 
    • This page is definitely pretty text-heavy 
  • B3 
    • I don’t like the very horizontal photo at the top. Definitely not the size that a portrait needs to be. We tried placing it elsewhere in the layout, but it messed with the balance of the page. 
    • Headline is touching the chancellor photo 
  • B5 
    • This page doesn’t seem too bad to me. I don’t think the photo needed that much attention and, while it’s pretty horizontal, it fits pretty much everything that we need to see into it. 
  • B6 
    • These photos were huge, I know. 
    • I definitely could have included some elements such as subheads or pull quotes in the story to take away from the size of the photos. I think buzz is also an area where we need more than 2 stories. It’s just not super feasible here either because of the lack of events going on on campus.   

Critique of Monday’s paper

A1:

  • The picture is a month old for top story
    • That woman has been in several photographs
  • Screenshot from student gov. Story is awkward
  • Too much text in headline for student gov story, takes up too much space
  • Can we abbreviate in sub heads? ARC story
    • Story is about the ARC but not photographed

A2:

  • Older Kams photo
  • Top photo is very large

A3:

  • The mask photo is awkwardly placed
  • Large portrait photo
  • Large photos at the bottom
  • Last photo is a little scary looking

A4:

  • Covalence bottom photo could be smaller
  • Lots of subheading in the paper in general

A5:

  • Large graphics but I like them

A6: 

  • Second headline has awkward space
  • taylor swift story shouldn’t be at the top
  • second story picture is large

B1:

  • Top photo is a little too big 
  • Could use more text

B2:

  • Way too much text
  • Could use another small photo with alumni story if we shrunk the picture on B1 bc there would be less text
  • Picture doesn’t necessarily fit with story
  • Rankings jump is very shory

B3:

  • Don’t love the portrait style picture at the top
  • Similar look every paper

Buzz:

  • Pictures are huge
  • Could use more stories